A good descriptive paragraph usually relies on words and phrases that appeal to a person's sight, smell, taste, sound, and touch.
This sample paragraph, which also narrates a story, relies on more description than the sample "Narration" paragraph. As a result, a person unfamiliar with airplane moves may not have a clear picture of what the author means when he notes "figure-eights, slow flight, and steep turns," but the description and narration of "air-starting" is vivid. Attention to such details as the rapidly dropping altitude and how that felt against the writer's body adds suspense and makes the reader feel as though she or he is experiencing the flight with the author.
Also note that the paragraph has a clear purpose, stated in the first sentence. The first sentence, sometimes called the "topic sentence," shapes the direction of the paragraph. If the paragraph, for example, went on to describe easy maneuvers, this topic sentence would not have made sense, and the organization would have been unclear. Every paragraph should have a clear topic sentence.
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The OWL is an extension of the Community College of
Denver Writing Center. Bret Hann, Writing Center Coordinator This project was made possible in part by a grant from the Technology Learning Grant and Revolving Loan Program, State of Colorado, Department of Higher Education. We are also grateful for the ongoing support of Colorado Community Colleges Online (CCCOnline).
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