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Name: Sally Student

Email Address: sstudent@ccd.cccoes.edu

Student I.D. number: 000-00-0000

Colorado Resident: yes

School: ccd

Class: English 122

Instructor: Donald Hogue

Due Date: Tuesday, Sept. 22nd Rough Draft

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I am arguing against students being separated in the classroom.

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Am I sticky to the point, can you determine what and where my thesis is located, am I backing up my opinion. I would appreciate any help you can give me. Please be critical. Thank you.

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Sally Student
Sept. 17, 1998
Engl 122
Section 401
Donald Hogue
Non-Research

Separation in Public Schools

Denver Public Elementary schools have re-opened for the fall semester with new twists. Mitchell Elementary School will initiate a pilot program that will separate students --putting all boys in one classroom and all girls in another classroomÛ-this practice does not benefit the children for the following reasons: their social skills and behaviors are affected at an early age, they are naive about the interactions with someone of the opposite sex and will the teachers be of the same sex as the children they are teaching?

It is very likely that some teachers believe this approach reduces social pressures. However, we must consider the fact that when children are separated by gender they are not being taught how to make the proper adjustments and decisions that correspond with the learning process of societyÌs everyday life. For instance children that may not have a sibling of the opposite sex would not learn how to share, play and work with a child of the opposite sex if they were not all in the same classroom; another example would be that this separation gives a child who may already be living in a dysfunctional environment at home where there is a poor relationship between the parents the impression that this is the correct way to live in todayÌs society. Furthermore, the childÌs interaction with a member of the opposite sex is important because it has a great influence on how they communicate in the classroom with one another as well as in public. For instance, a class that contained a single gender would be create a greater distraction than a class that contained bother genders. The children would feel more comfortable talking and playing around with each other whereas, if both genders were in the same classroom they would be a little shy and uncomfortable. They also are able to mentor with each other when both genders are included in the classroom. For example if one can run, jump, add or subtract better than the other the opposite sex can provide a different prospective on how that task or exercise can be done.

Although some teachers believe that one of the benefits of separate classes would be that the students would not be preoccupied at this early age with school crushes, romances and pleasing the opposite sex. They are naïve and become confused about the relationships that actually occur between boys and girls when they are separated by gender. It creates an atmosphere among the students that itÌs wrong to associate or interact with a member of the opposite sex during the school day. Meanwhile, in everyday life men and women interact closely together while working, during leisure time and in romantic situations. Boys should respect girls and realize that they cannot physically treat them as they would another boy and vice-versa. How can this be learned if they are separated and donÌt have the opportunity to see what the consequences are. Statistics have shown that girls are more mature than boys at this age and become interested in boys, while boys are still in that "girls are icky" stage. Would this open up a whole new can of worms of girls and boys believing that same sex relationships are acceptable?

Furthermore, should the teachers be of the same sex? Some experts say no it affects the childÌs learning ability, limits their choices, and the child might be more comfortable with a teacher of the opposite sex.

Date: 9/18/98
Time: 5:00pm

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